Score: 6

"Okay"

submission: Peview of wat to come

date: July 12, 2008

You just need to make it faster. Hit the lines faster, make the dialog flow into the story. Maybe you can also work with backgrounds. It was good and could be funnier. Try to experiment with sound effects also.

Score: 9

"Merose"

submission: It's My Birthday!

date: July 10, 2008

There was something deeply disturbing about that video, but it was pretty sick. I liked the off bright colors you used. It made the flash friendlier. Anyhow, Happy Birthday! Good flash.

Score: 3

"Good Artistic skills"

submission: The Adventures Of Fetus

date: July 8, 2008

The artwork is there, but no story. Personally, I was kind of disgusted by it, but as far as flash goes: you need to add some music and some background or storyline. It feels very fast, so you may want to slow down some of the scenes. Given your drawing skills, I hope to see more flashes from you. . . . .maybe a bit classier ones.

Score: 4

"Functional Problems"

submission: Battle of the Bacon

date: July 4, 2008

The concept of this flash is fine. The initial theme song was too short for the flash. Unfortunately, the entire flash was too laggy on my computer. I found that abnormal since your flash only had stick figure elements throughout. I would suggest that you find ways to make your flash efficient. Other than that the flash isn't bad.

Score: 6

"Solid Flash"

submission: Fun With Fireworks

date: July 4, 2008

The flash work is solid. Everything was well done. I wasn't quite sure if you were going for dark humor or trying to send out a message or something of that nature. Is the fire in the pants symbolism? Or is it supposed to be funny? Your aim wasn't so clear to me, but good audio and visual work.

Score: 7

"Haha"

submission: Guitar Hero On Tour lol

date: July 3, 2008

Even though you're ragging on GH, the flash was freakin hillarious. I doan like the DS myself, but I love GH. I could tell that it was one voice that played all the characters. Comic timing is pretty good.

Score: 2

"Wrong Application"

submission: Destroying The Web Part1

date: July 3, 2008

Maybe you could have made this a game instead of a movie. Maybe it would have been more entertaining that way.

Score: 2

"Announcement"

submission: Hero Man Preview

date: July 2, 2008

This is a god awful flash that does not have any value. Basically, this is an announcement of your work that you can easily do on a forum. The character's facial actions did not match the dialog and your prompt is not spelled correctly. I would rather just watched your work when you release it, instead of watching this announcement. Sorry dude, try better.

Score: 8

"Solid Work"

submission: Flash Dancer

date: July 2, 2008

For your first flash, this is excellent work. The visuals synched nicely with the audio: that is to mention both artistic visuals and dancing choreography. Another plus is that your character was not a 2 dimensional stick figure that lots of people tend to fall back on. There was a lot 3-D element that came out both by contrast and use of color. Some improvements that you can use is maybe defining a background and integrating that into the entire picture. Another suggestion for improvement would be to defining the facial characteristic of your character, or maybe detailing the work. This submission is great for Newgrounds. Maybe we can see some of your other work here.

Score: 10

"Amen"

submission: Awesome Gaiden

date: July 1, 2008

This flash was so funny that I had to watch it again just for the ending. The comic timing here is brilliant. The fast pace really shows how ridiculously hard the game is.